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Her nose wrinkles as her eyes squint to look at the slate grey sky through the trees that try to comfort each other with their lissome limbs as their leaves flutter to the earth below. As the wind whips through their branches, the girl can almost hear the foliage whisper to one another.
๐ท๐๐'๐ก ๐๐๐ฆ, ๐๐๐ฃ๐... ๐กโ๐๐ฆ'๐๐ ๐๐ ๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ฅ๐ก ๐ฆ๐๐๐.
More leaves fall to the sod below, her auburn eyes following the path in which they follow to rest upon the others. She exhales slowly, gentle whites puffs of carbon dioxide caressing her supple lips before disappearing into the air around her. As the girl walks, fragile and thin twigs snap and crackle beneath her small boots. The bushes shiver in the autumn winds as she looks to them, their bright green leaves now a beautiful red. Every other leaf being a dark brown, or a light orange.
A far distance away, the small female picks up the echo of a cry.
-...๐๐๐!
The girl's attention is immediately drawn to her right, as that's where she believes the call came from. She freezes in her place, awaiting another sign of where said sound was coming from. As she begins walking cautiously a crack is heard to her left, and she feels as if she is being watched. Hunted, even. Her heart begins pumping adrenaline through her veins, kicking in her fight or flight instinct.
And to her surprise...
๐๐ ๐ฑ๐ ๐ฒ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
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Wow, what happens next!!?
ReplyHonestly, I'm not sure what is to happen next, as I didn't plan on making it a book or long story. It was simply practice. My goal was to describe everything I could in as much detail as possible. However Guest, I am so happy that you enjoyed it anyway. Much love to you. <3
ReplyI wrote a book and had it published without descriptive writing because it is a filler which is not needed when there is enough going on with the characters and the story.
I like your last paragraph because something is happening where as to me the first two paragraphs are totally unnecessary. This is only my opinion.
Here is the beginning of my book. "Happy birthday to you. Happy birthday to you . . . " Sang the voices around Paul Henry as his arrival to join mankind was celebrated for the sixtieth time.
He stood in the back yard of his son David's home where he was surrounded by grown kids, grandkids, nieces, nephews, brothers, sisters, and in - laws. The whole jovial brood.
"Freeze a jolly good fellow and so say all of us," they sang.
'Perhaps I'd be better off frozen, frozen stiff and then I wouldn't have to listen to this racket,' Paul thought. Out loud he said to his daughter, Nareen, who, with his six year old grandson, stood by his side, "I wouldn't mind a good stiff drink."
"I'll get it for you grandpa," said the child who ran off ducking and darting through the throng and returned with a glass of lemonade. Paul examined the glass for any sign of dirt and drank the contents. He patted Arnie on the head. "Good boy." He sighed. Finish of example.
I wrote twenty four chapters with absolutely none of that descriptive writing because there was so much going on with the plot there was no room for it. I made sure something happened with every chapter. Of course I described people and things when necessary but I didn't carry on and on with descriptions.
The main character, Paul Henry, discovers he has cancer and moves away, then meets a beautiful woman and has difficulties with her. There are other characters who he meets and gets mixed up with. The book has a surprise ending.
Sorry to say that I don't like descriptive writing and my opinion is that if you have enough going on with your plot whether it be a story or novel you don't need it. Sorry.
If you want to go on with it do so. Each to their own.
ReplyThough I am enthusiastic for such a lengthy reply, I have to say that it was a bit... what's the word for it... unnecessary? I was not aiming to write a book or anything of the sorts. Instead, it was a practice run specifically for descriptive writing, understand? I do not plan on having it published or even read by many. I didn't expect it to get attention whatsoever. Now, in my opinion, descriptive writing is the most immersed writing, and doesn't leave much for confusion, as the reader already knows everything. I remember reading such novels with extreme descriptions, and I couldn't help but drown in the plot. (In a good way, of course.) Simple writing just bores me and makes me want to simply stop reading. I appreciate your response and opinion. Much love. <3
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