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If I could be poetic
I’d feel quite copacetic
If I could sing a song
It wouldn’t be so strong
If I could draw an eye
I think that’d be a lie
If I could make a painting
It wont be entertaining
If I were in a play
It wont be any day
For the only thing I sought
Is the one thing I’m not
But how could I achieve
If I never truly believe?
So I’ll stand on my feet
And I won’t act meek
And I’ll fight till I meet
The one thing that I seek
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(You don’t have to read this part.)
Do you have any tips on how I could improve this? I feel like it’s weird that the speaker was talking about emotions in the first two lines, and then talked about what they felt that they couldn’t do. I also may have overthought this. I made it where the speaker feels like they aren’t talented (specifically in the arts). In the end though, they come to realize that they have to try to make it. The change in writing style represents the change in their way of thinking.
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I don't have any advice to give, but I really like this, personally I felt that the transition was very smooth. Also I learned a new word, so thanks!
ReplyThanks you! I always love learning new words.
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